Ok, so body paragraph 1 was amazing! However, I found somethings you might want to change in body paragraph 2. First, "He saw all the beautiful things around the swamp that surprised him. Until he found the rarest flower he could ever find." This could be changed a bit! So, is change it to, "Around the swamp, he saw many beautiful things that surprised him, until he found the rarest flower anyone could ever find." It just sounds a bit better, and you and your professor might like it, too! Everything else was amazing.
